CLASSIC – NLN #1 – Scene 02 – I Want A New Car

Ratings

Story & Plot: 8/10 – Young Daughter heads to Daddies work, so she can beg him for a new car. He doesn’t think her Mother would want her to have one, and so he declines. However, she wants to work things out and is willing to do whatever Daddy wants.

Acting: 6/10 – The interaction between the two, in the beginning, is poorly executed; the lack of personal connection when talking to each other and the way they speak. The talking doesn’t flow naturally, which ruins the moment. You’re just waiting for them to ‘move it along’ and this isn’t how it should be. Even when the initial groping starts, there isn’t any passion between them.

Directing & Sex: 7/10 – Seeing both of them in the frame together only works when you don’t really care about facial expression. If you wanted to see emotion, you would position the camera towards their face, while being behind the person they are talking to. I can’t say the sex was bad, it’s fine to be honest. My disappointment comes from the pornstars lack of understanding on what to say and when; an example is when she says ‘what a big dick you have’ and she hasn’t even seen it (cringe worthy).

What They Should Have Done

• Followed her into the office, as she interacts with his employees (this shows that they aren’t alone in the building)
• As she gets to his office, she waits outside and watches him talking to a disgruntled employee. She knows he’s going to be in a bad mood, she thinks about what she might say, the employee leaves.
• She goes into her handbag and pulls out a spray, it says ‘Control’ on it. She wants to use it to help her get the car she wants. She closes her eyes and takes a deep breath before walking in.
• The conversation between the two should be comfortable and normal, not awkward or fake
• Still mad, he bangs on the table which startles her, and she jumps giving off a little sound
• He looks up, apologizes but is happy she is there, although he doesn’t know why
• She can’t say until he calms down, so she walks over to him and tells him that he shouldn’t allow things to stress him out.
• She calmly walks over to him and starts massaging his shoulders, so he feels better
• She grabs the spray from her bag and puts a decent amount onto her hands. He questions what it is and she explains it’s to help cool him down.
• She starts to massage his neck, and he expresses how cooling it feels and that she’s such a good girl
• As she continues to massage his shoulders, he starts to feel faint (the camera effect should that he’s becoming dizzy) and leans his head onto this hand, asking her to stop for a second
• As he takes a minute to stop the dizziness, she walks over to his office door and locks it, making sure no one is around, pulling any blinds down
• Now she knows the spray is working, she tries to suggest a few things to see if it really works
• She asks if he’s okay and suggests he grab a drink, which he does from his cupboard after replying ‘that’s a great idea’
• Now she wants to know if he will give her a drink, which he does
• She says she’s been thinking about something, and it’s been stressing her out
• He suggests that he should give her a massage back, as it made him feel great
• She grabs her spray and puts some on her neck
• She sits on his desk, and he starts massaging her shoulders and neck
• She asks if he likes her perfume, he leans in to smell it, this just tops up the effect of Control
• She’s dreaming about something that makes her smile, as she bites her bottom lip and ask him if Mom helps him de-stress when he gets home
• He says no, that she doesn’t really know how to and the massage she just gave him was perfect
• ‘What about Andy, don’t you guys watch the game together?’ she asks about her brother
• ‘He’s always out, probably getting laid, what your old man used to do, so I can’t blame him’
• ‘What would you want Mom to do when you get stressed?’ she asks
• ‘Sometimes I want her to make me feel good, like she used to when we were younger, it’s like she’s not interested any more’
• She smiles, bits her lip again and tries another test, to see if her Control spray is as good as it suggests
• She turns and looks into his eyes, seductively, she states that she will always be there at home if he ever needed to de-stress after work
• ‘You’re the best daughter any man could want, you make me happy all the time, don’t ever change’ he says
• Now she goes in for the big question, ‘Would you buy me a car Daddy, I really need one now’
• As he thinks of an answer, he steps back and grabs his forehead, saying ‘I think I’m feeling dizzy again’
• Panicked, she grabs her spray, puts more on her neck and hugs him
• Looking into his eyes, she says, ‘Why don’t you take off your shirt, so I can massage your back properly’
• ‘Sure, that would be perfect’
• She stands in front of him to help him take off his shirt. As she gets to the lower buttons, she looks at his trousers, bites her lip again and asks if she can take his pants off.
• ‘Sure, anything for you’ he says
• ‘I want you to close your eyes and think of Mom, from when you were younger, as she looked when you would go to see her’ she temps him
• She gets onto her knees and starts undoing his belt
• She knows that this is what she wants and well as what he needs
• She pulls his boxers down and is amazed at his cock. ‘I would watch you all the time when you got out the shower, but I never saw this’.
• ‘I wonder if Andy takes after you’ as she admires his cock. She takes a deep breath and swallows the build up of spit in her mouth. She looks up at him, his eyes closed looking straight, she starts kissing his cock slowly looking to see if he opens his eyes.
• ‘Keep your eyes closed’ she continues kissing his cock from top to bottom along the shaft
• ‘Oh Mary’ he says, thinking of his wife
• The passion between the two has to be there, she has a curious mind and wants to experience things with him, so she’s not going to suddenly switch into pornstar mode. Her curiosity makes her think about how she needs to do things, as well as thinking about how he would want her to be.
• The sex needs to be slow and not rushed, she wants him to believe he is making love to her Mother
• At no point does he start giving it to her hardcore, he knows he must be gentle because she’s special
• Since she doesn’t know much about cum, she asks ‘Daddy please let me swallow your cum, I want to know what it tastes like’
• ‘Mary I love it when you call me Daddy, I want to cum inside you so badly’ he says as he pushes his cock deeper
• ‘Not now, I want you to feed me, I want to taste your love’ she moans
• ‘Whatever you want this time, but next time it’s whatever I want’ he tells her while he looks into her eyes
• ‘I’m not on the pill, so we can’t risk anything, but you’ll know when it’s time’
• ‘I’m going to cum now, I can’t hold it’ he says tensing up
• She pulls away from him, gets onto her knees and looks up into his eyes, ‘Feed Me Daddy’